RE: Quick! Opinion needed...

Subject: RE: Quick! Opinion needed...
From: "Cook, Jenise" <jenise -dot- cook-crabbe -at- pacificlife -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 22 May 2001 16:56:18 -0700

Doug, I didn't save your e-mail address (sorry, Eric). FWIW, I prefer and
use the format Janice describes below. If you'd like to see an example,
contact me directly.

Jenise Cook-Crabbe
jcook -at- pacificlife -dot- com

-----Original Message-----
From: Janice Gelb [mailto:janiceg -at- marvin -dot- eng -dot- sun -dot- com]
Sent: Tuesday, May 22, 2001 2:02 PM
Subject: Re: Quick! Opinion needed...

Doug Grossman wrote:
> My *personal* preference is this format:
> 1. Open your Web browser and enter http://hellothere. Hit the
> "Enter" key to accept this URL, and the "Welcome to Your Life"
> page displays. You are now connected to the "Your Life" server.
> 2. Click on the "Log into Your Life" link, and the "Enter
> Network Password" dialog box displays.
> 3. Enter your user name and password in the appropriate text boxes
> and hit the "Enter" key to accept. Your personal page, showing your
> various "Life" folders, displays. If you do not have a user name
> and/or password, click on the link to e-mail your administrator in
> order to obtain this information.

Just to prove Bill's point earlier, I disagree with this
approach. We try to keep the action and the result on
separate lines, so readers can clearly see what they're
supposed to do versus what the result will be.

1. In your Web browser, type http://hellothere and press

The "Welcome to Your Life" page appears. You are now
connected to the "Your Life" server.

2. Click the "Log into Your Life" link.

The "Enter Network Password" dialog box appears.

3. Type your user name and password in the appropriate text
boxes and press Enter.

Your personal page appears, showing your various "Life" folders.

If you do not have a user name or password, click the link to
email your administrator to obtain them.

Also, we try very hard to say "Type XXX" rather than "Enter XXX"
to avoid confusion with the Enter key.


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