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I would say that the student's version is correct, and yours is not.
The phrase "only included" makes it sound like something else could be done
with the factors besides including them. It sounds like the point of the
sentence to say nothing is done with these factors other than including them
on the form.
Also, in your version, it sounds like factors other than those that "are the
same across all pipelines and internal companies" could also be included in
From: trm -at- telusplanet -dot- net [mailto:trm -at- telusplanet -dot- net]
Sent: Thursday, June 13, 2002 7:42 AM
Subject: Another Grammar Question
I have a summer student helping me with my Help system. She is an
university graduate and has a lot of writing expertise.
She pointed out a sentence she felt may be wrong. We took out my Gregg
Reference Manual. We are still stumped.
My sentence: Factors that are the same across all pipelines and internal
companies are only included in this form.
Summer Students: Only factors that are the same across all pipelines and
internal companies are included in this form.
I don't feel the sentence meaning is changed when the word "only" is moved.
I feel my sentence may be correct, but her sentence sounds better. I also
feel this may be a style issue.
According to my reference manual, the adverb "only" should be placed as
close to the mord modified. When I look at my sentence, I see "only" is
placed beside the verb "included".
Which sentence should we use?
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