Re: website

Subject: Re: website
From: Greg Holmes <greg -dot- holmes -at- gmail -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Fri, 22 Oct 2004 12:31:46 -0400

Michele Davis wrote:

>I revamped my website. I have yet to link up the
>krautboy site with mine, and the education.html
>file isn't done yet, but the rest is live. If
>anyone has the time I'd appreciate feedback!


The links at the bottom of this page (the
ultimate home page):

are pretty small, at least in Mozilla on my
1024x768 display. I mistook them at
first for administratrivia (like legal
disclaimers and such).

I like the presentation of services, but I
kind of had to work at it to connect those
bullets to the tiny links at the bottom of the
page. Which link do I click on to learn
about your Change Management services, for

I almost think it would be better to have
each of those bullets link to a page,
describing that service and how I can get
it from you. These pages could also link
to samples or clients of that specific

I didn't get to look at it all, but I
noticed an error (I think):
"Expoentially, learning occured in regards to
male medical conditions."

Did you mean "exponentially"? And if so,
what does that mean in the context?

Also, "occurred" needs two Rs.

I think that here:
"Our clients have been profuse in how well we do our work.
We are a fantastic asset for any company. Just look at what
some clients' have said about us!"

you may want to say "profuse in their praise of" or
somesuch. And "clients" does not need a trailing
apostrophe, as it is not possessive.

I hope that these comments help.

Greg Holmes


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