RE: Wrong? Poor style? OK?

Subject: RE: Wrong? Poor style? OK?
From: "Sharon Burton" <sharon -at- anthrobytes -dot- com>
To: "'Nancy Allison'" <maker -at- verizon -dot- net>, "'Milan Davidovic'" <milan -dot- lists -at- gmail -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 24 Mar 2009 07:45:03 -0700

What about making the actor obvious? How about:

You can select one of two ways to save the test results.


sharon

Sharon Burton
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[mailto:techwr-l-bounces+sharon=anthrobytes -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On
Behalf Of Nancy Allison
Sent: Tuesday, March 24, 2009 7:29 AM
To: Milan Davidovic
Cc: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
Subject: Re: Wrong? Poor style? OK?

Milan, it has to do with menu picks.

Everyone, it quickly became apparent that the way out of the problem is
to rewrite it as "There are two ways to save test results." However, the
initial grammatical question interests me in its own right.

My editor's note was "needs a noun somewhere" I think the issue is the
use of

"how test results are saved"

as the direct object of

"controls"

I suspect that, as my editor suggests, it's better to have a noun as a
DO, rather than a clause introduced by an adverb. But I think it's
largely a stylistic issue and not strictly a grammatical one.

She has a laser eye, this editor!

By the way, someone once posted the address for a list for laser-eyed
editors. Can you send it to me? I think I need to improve my education.

--Nancy


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