Re: Wrong? Poor style? OK?

Subject: Re: Wrong? Poor style? OK?
From: Caroline Tabach <caroline -dot- tabach -at- gmail -dot- com>
To: Nancy Allison <maker -at- verizon -dot- net>
Date: Tue, 24 Mar 2009 17:37:13 +0200

While the sentence did look OK to me the first time round, I would
venture to suggest that maybe the word "how" bothered the editor.
Many people do not like to use question words as parts of sentences,
for example, instead of writing "how many people" to use "the number
of people".
So maybe she wanted you to write "the way test results are saved"?

On Tue, Mar 24, 2009 at 5:20 PM, Nancy Allison <maker -at- verizon -dot- net> wrote:
> Yes -- good point. We are all doing a bit of exegesis here to figure out
> what the original criticism was (or what my original sin was . . . )
> I think the issue is as I presented it: my editor was indicating that
> the use of "how test results are saved" as a DO is undesirable.
> I wondered if anyone on the list would also identify this as a problem,
> and elaborate.
> As David has pointed out, I've already rewritten the sentence, so
> suggestions as to how to rewrite it are not really needed.
> If you read the sentence, thought "Nope, looks fine to me!" that's as
> valid a response as any other.
> Thanks, folks.
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Caroline Tabach
Technical Writer
e-mail: caroline -dot- tabach -at- gmail -dot- com

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