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From: McLauchlan, Kevin [mailto:Kevin -dot- McLauchlan -at- safenet-inc -dot- com]
Sent: Monday, June 21, 2010 9:26 AM
To: sharon -at- anthrobytes -dot- com; techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
Subject: RE: orientation in description
If you face the appliance from the FRONT, the power supply
is in the back LEFT corner.
However, because the operator would likely open the back
door of the equipment rack and face the BACK of the appliance,
in order to check or to swap power supplies, I referred,
in my original sentence to:
"...(back panel right corner, as you face the REAR of the appliance)"
That's the part I was wondering about.
But I'll take your advice about splitting the sentence.
PS: Hmm. Why do both your message and
my message (which preceded yours) have the
same depth of nesting, below?
What mail reader are you using, and what settings
do you have for showing nesting/threading?
I know Outlook (which I'm using) sucks at this, but...
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Sharon Burton [mailto:sharon -at- anthrobytes -dot- com]
> Make it 2 short sentences?
> The power supply is in the lower right corner of the back
> panel (as you face
> the applicance). During normal operation, the LED is green.
> Sharon Burton
> Content Consultant
> IM: sharonvburton -at- yahoo -dot- com
> Twitter: sharonburton
> McLauchlan, Kevin asked
> Sent: Monday, June 21, 2010 9:10 AM
> To: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> Subject: orientation in description
> We sell an encryption appliance that is meant to live in a standard
> equipment rack in a server room.
> In the maintenance section, I had this sentence, which must
> have seemed ok
> when I originally wrote it, but which now seems fishy.
> "In normal operation , each power supply (back panel right
> corner, as you
> face the rear of the appliance) shows a green LED, indicating proper
> I'm sure it can be critiqued for other reasons (go ahead...) but I'm
> interested in how best to refer to the orientation and
> location of parts on
> a piece of equipment.
> Is it "standard" to locate stuff (like rooms and features of
> a house, or
> parts of an appliance) by referring to the overall item (equipment,
> building, etc.) as though the reader is facing it front on?
> Or should it
> matter, as long as you specify the point-of-view in the
> current situation?
> In this case, I'm referring to basically exterior orientation
> and location.
> This is not the kind of huge and/or intricate equipment where
> you need a 3D
> co-ordinate system to guide a mechanic/tech into the bowels
> of the beast.
> Just a couple of power supplies and a trio of fans that are externally
> accessible and are hot-swappable. And loud... :-)
> Anyway, my current deadlines are not frantically critical, so
> apparently I'm
> allowing myself the luxury of second-guessing myself.
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