RE: Need a little help in wording

Subject: RE: Need a little help in wording
From: "Margaret Cekis" <Margaret -dot- Cekis -at- comcast -dot- net>
To: "'William Sherman'" <bsherman77 -at- embarqmail -dot- com>, <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Sat, 24 Dec 2011 21:59:34 -0500

William Sherman asked for a little help rewording a couple of sentences
about adaptations:
________________________
Diversified in the sentence: "The most diversified adaptation that plants
have are their leaves
which can do amazing things such as capture water, change colors, and act as
the fingerprint of the plant."
_______________________
I'd suggest: "In plants, the leaves display the most diverse adaptations;
Leaves are used for amazing things, such as capturing water, changing
colors, and acting as the fingerprint of the plant."
_______________________
Herbivorous in the sentence: "Just like plants, animals have specialized
adaptations to help
them survive the ever-changing challenges of nature. Some examples of
adaptations that animals have are - herbivorous animals like horses or cows
have flat teeth to help them grind up grasses.
________________________
I'd suggest: "Some examples of adaptations that animals have are the flat
teeth of herbivorous animals like horses or cows that help them grind up
grasses.
__________________________
Diversified in the sentence: "Finally, the most diversified physical
characteristics of many
animals are their feathers"
__________________________
The diversified physical characteristics of birds are most visible in their
feathers, although their feet show a wide range of adaptations, too.

Merry Christmas, too
_______________________________________
Margaret Cekis, Johns Creek GA


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