RE: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals

Subject: RE: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals
From: "Porrello, Leonard" <lporrello -at- illumina -dot- com>
To: Anonymous <anonymous -at- techwhirl -dot- com>, Techwr-l <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 25 Jun 2013 15:06:57 +0000

On a side note, why does your style guide avoid "you", and how would you rewrite your examples without resorting to the passive voice? (Disclaimer: I have nothing against the passive voice when it is used judiciously, and am not looking to debate the issue.)

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Subject: Advice on rewriting translated ops manuals

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Greetings,

I need some advice.

I've been asked to review and edit some Ops manuals from our Chinese tech pubs department for a product we will be selling domestically. It appears that the manual was written in Chinese and then translated into English. It is in bad shape. I don't have access to their style guide, but I've noticed that they use the pronoun "you" in their manuals and we don't in our manuals. For example, "Use [Quick Admit] only if you do not have the time or information to fully admit a patient. " and "You can transfer a patient with an XYZ or ABC to a new location without re-entering the patient demographic information or changing the settings. "

They also use "will" throughout the manual and we do not. For example, "Select a patient and then click [Import]. Then the monitor *will* update the information for the corresponding patient." We would write, "Select a patient and then click [Import]. The monitor updates the information for the corresponding patient."

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