RE: How can I phrase this?

Subject: RE: How can I phrase this?
From: "Porrello, Leonard" <lporrello -at- illumina -dot- com>
To: Lauren <lauren -at- writeco -dot- net>, "techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Mon, 1 Jul 2013 20:40:22 +0000

Very nice (in general), and I would tweak it just a bit.

WARNING: Your ear may be damaged if you wear the hearing aid for longer than the maximum number of hours per day specified in the xyz section of the Instructions for Use. If the maximum number of hours for safe use are not specified in your copy of the Instructions for Use, get this information from your prescribing specialist.

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From: techwr-l-bounces+lporrello=illumina -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com [mailto:techwr-l-bounces+lporrello=illumina -dot- com -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On Behalf Of Lauren
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Subject: Re: How can I phrase this?

On 7/1/2013 9:58 AM, Gene Kim-Eng wrote:
> WARNING: Do not exceed the number of hours per day specified by the
> hearing care specialist. If there is not a number specified, go GET
> one from the specialist. Excessive use may cause injury to the patient.

I prefer to avoid negatives and to write with actions a user must perform rather than those to avoid. So I would rephrase the warning for action and use the above warning with Keith's suggestions because he is correct about the lawsuit potential for using defective warnings.

WARNING: Damage to the ear will occur when the hearing aid is worn for more than number of hours per day specified. Get the specific number of hours from the prescribing specialist when the hours are not specified.




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