Re: You are & repetition

Subject: Re: You are & repetition
From: M -dot- Vina-Baltsas -at- mindray -dot- com
To: Kathleen MacDowell <kathleen -dot- eamd -at- gmail -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 15 Oct 2013 16:10:12 -0400

Kathleen,

Thanks for noticing the typo. Here is the full statement that I copied
from the manual.

*You can* review an individual calculation by selecting its corresponding
column and then selecting [Original Calc]. *You can* record the currently
displayed calculations or perform another calculation in this window.


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Date:
10/15/2013 04:06 PM
Subject:
Re: You are & repetition



Michelle,

Two things:

--It looks like there's a typo in your statement--shouldn't the "is" in
"or perform another calculation is this window." be "in"?
--I would not leave out the "you can" in the examples you gave, based
solely on that example. But I think it depends on the context--it sounds
like this is an explanation of a pane that opens displaying the results of
calculations. So depending on what the other text says, you may be right.

Kathleen


On Tue, Oct 15, 2013 at 2:52 PM, <M -dot- Vina-Baltsas -at- mindray -dot- com> wrote:
I'm editing a Chinese to English translated manual. I've noticed that "you
can" is repeated all over the place. I don't feel it's necessary. I think
this could easily be left out and be understood as seen in the second
sentence. BTW, I'm not looking to change the other parts of the sentence,
just want to gather opinions about the use of "you can". TIA.

1) *You can* record the displayed calculations or perform another
calculation is this window.

2) *Record* the displayed calculations or perform another calculation is
this window.


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Michelle Viña-Baltsas
Senior Technical Writer


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