Brochure revisions

Subject: Brochure revisions
From: Lisa Buckleton <lisa -at- CS -dot- CURTIN -dot- EDU -dot- AU>
Date: Wed, 4 Aug 1993 07:23:43 GMT

Reading a post on a rewrite of a university brochure put me
in mind of a segment on an Australian TV show (The Investigators)
which was shown this week. The presenter took a copy of a
loan guarantor document to the sidewalks and asked some of the
passing parade whether they would read the first sentence and
then explain what it said. This sentence was about 1,700 words long!!

Only one person actually read the whole sentence out (it took
about 6 minutes). Naturally, the meaning was somewhat obscured.

I don't know if even a rewrite would help this one!

Lisa Buckleton
Curtin University W.A. Fire Brigades Board
Email : lisa -at- cs -dot- curtin -dot- edu -dot- au lisab -at- wafire -dot- DIALix -dot- oz -dot- au
Three thinks are sure in this life; Death, taxes and

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