Re: problem sentence

Subject: Re: problem sentence
From: "Segal, Betty S." <bss3 -at- PHPMTS1 -dot- EM -dot- CDC -dot- GOV>
Date: Sun, 11 Sep 1994 14:24:00 EST

"As the forest is logged of its pines, the decrease of its 'confierousness
over time and location can be useful for visual display and analysis, and
ultimately a better managed forest may result."

I don't know whose query this was (I can't read the original posting because
something wrong with my LAN software this weekend) but I picked it up from
Carol Roberts reply.

I wonder if the major point here isn't the use of visual display/analysis. I
suggest rewording to make that the subject of the sentence:

Visual display and analysis of the types and location of trees in the forest
can, over time, show how logging the pines causes a decrease in conifers.
This type of analysis might ultimately lead to a better managed forest.

Betty Segal
Sr. Instructional Development Specialist (Instructional Editor)
Centers for Disease Control and Prevention
bss3 -at- phpmts1 -dot- em -dot- cdc -dot- gov

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