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Subject:Re: Passive voice -- a story From:Richard Mateosian <srm -at- C2 -dot- ORG> Date:Fri, 26 Jan 1996 11:24:58 -0800
> We called it "programmer documentation." Essentially, the manual was a
> running narrative of thousands of lines of code -- what the code was
> doing as it was doing it.
> We decided after much thought to rewrite in
> passive voice. [The input number is validated. If the number is not
> valid, an error message appears. If the number is valid, the next
> unused index number is retrieved and assigned to the record...]
Lines of code are commands to the system that executes them. Running
commentary should translate those commands into English.
CALL VALINP ;Validate the input
IF (CODE = ERROR) ;Was it OK?
CALL DISPERR ; No - display the error message
REPEAT ; Go back and ask again
RECNO = NEXT() ; Yes - Assign next unused index to the record
Here, as elsewhere, active voice makes for a clearer, more concise