Re: Challenge to active-verb advocates

Subject: Re: Challenge to active-verb advocates
From: Robert Plamondon <robert -at- PLAMONDON -dot- COM>
Date: Sat, 27 Jan 1996 20:50:34 -0800

On Thu, 25 Jan 1996 DLE -at- alpha -dot- sunquest -dot- com wrote:

> Enough of the easy rewrites. Can you recast the following sentence in
> active voice and improve it?

> "The leaves on the sidewalk were kicked and scattered by passing
> feet."

No problem. How about as an octosyllabic couplet?

Feet, passing through the tumbled sheaves,
Unnoticed stirred the sidewalk's leaves.

-- Robert
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