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Subject:Word choice: separately packaged within ? From:Dan Roberts <Dan_Roberts -at- IBI -dot- COM> Date:Mon, 31 Mar 1997 09:36:08 EDT
I'm working on the packing list/cover letter for a product I doc. The
package for this product, Product W, includes the software on tape or
diskette, and a set of doc. The package *also* includes 2 additional
software products - Product F and Product E - along with these
products software and doc. Product F and Product E are shrinkwrapped
as 2 complete entities, and dropped into Product W's box.
So I've come up with a sentence in the overall packing list/cover
letter "Product F is separately packaged within Product W" and
"Product E is separately packaged within Product W". Yet, this
*sounds* completelyy gross!
Can anyone provide, off-list preferably, any better phrasing? Please
send any responses to dan_roberts -at- ibi -dot- com