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Subject:Re: Question of clarity From:"Parks, Beverly" <ParksB -at- EMH1 -dot- HQISEC -dot- ARMY -dot- MIL> Date:Mon, 21 Jun 1999 09:05:33 -0700
I'd probably leave the comma, but change "and" to "then".
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Melissa Morgan [SMTP:mmorgan -at- INTREPID -dot- CDG-HARGRAY -dot- COM]
> Here's the sentence:
> From the Plant Menu, select (13) for Work
> with Whatever, and press Enter.
> A co-worker suggested that I remove the
> second comma. I explained that I put it
> there to cue the user...to clearly separate
> the sub-actions that make up the step.