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Subject:Re: problem sentence From:"Segal, Betty S." <bss3 -at- PHPMTS1 -dot- EM -dot- CDC -dot- GOV> Date:Sun, 11 Sep 1994 14:24:00 EST
"As the forest is logged of its pines, the decrease of its 'confierousness
over time and location can be useful for visual display and analysis, and
ultimately a better managed forest may result."
I don't know whose query this was (I can't read the original posting because
something wrong with my LAN software this weekend) but I picked it up from
Carol Roberts reply.
I wonder if the major point here isn't the use of visual display/analysis. I
suggest rewording to make that the subject of the sentence:
Visual display and analysis of the types and location of trees in the forest
can, over time, show how logging the pines causes a decrease in conifers.
This type of analysis might ultimately lead to a better managed forest.
Betty Segal
Sr. Instructional Development Specialist (Instructional Editor)
Centers for Disease Control and Prevention
bss3 -at- phpmts1 -dot- em -dot- cdc -dot- gov