RE: Wording without he/she

Subject: RE: Wording without he/she
From: "McClare, Scott" <smcclare -at- neptec -dot- com>
To: "'TECHWR-L'" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Thu, 24 Feb 2000 16:03:26 -0500

> -----Original Message-----
> From: @m [mailto:sdeichmann -at- voicemobility -dot- com]
> Sent: Thursday, February 24, 2000 2:01 PM
> To: TECHWR-L
> Subject: Wording without he/she

> One idea I had was to use:
>
> "The subscriber you have selected has dependent mailboxes and cannot be
> removed. Please remove these mailboxes before removing the subscriber."
>
> However I don't think this statement is as clear as the first one.

I personally think this revision is more clear than the original; in fact,
it was exactly what I would have suggested. You also might be able to get
away with "Please remove these mailboxes first" for the second sentence,
since the context makes it clear what mailboxes you are removing, and why.

Take care,

Scott

--
Scott A. McClare - Technical Writer
Neptec Design Group Ltd., Kanata, Ontario, Canada
(613) 599-7603 x504
smcclare -at- neptec -dot- com




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