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I don't like, and was taught to avoid, leading sentences that end in a
colon, unless the bullets complete the leading sentence. In this case, I
would avoid the colon and lead the list with "The points from the meeting
I would also probably, depending on the context of the document, include
some identifier about the meeting in the sentence, whether it is a meeting
name or a date.
Additionally, both of the proposed sentences are acceptable, but sentence 2
does need the comma that Richard pointed out. The differences between the
two sentences are that 1 is "active" voice and 2 is "passive" voice. This
is important to know if someone should mention the voice in the document.
> -----Original Message-----
> From: techwr-l-bounces+lt34=csus -dot- edu -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> [mailto:techwr-l-bounces+lt34=csus -dot- edu -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On
> Behalf Of Combs, Richard
> Sent: Thursday, February 22, 2007 7:35 AM
> To: Hemang Antani; techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> Subject: RE: Sentense construction
> Hemang Antani wrote:
> > Which of the following sentence construction would be suitable for
> > American
> > readers:
> > (1) Listed below are the points discussed during the meeting.
> > (2) During the meeting we discussed points listed below.
> "During the meeting, we discussed:" -- followed by the bullet list.
> Discard unnecessary words. :-)
> Richard G. Combs
> Senior Technical Writer
> Polycom, Inc.
> richardDOTcombs AT polycomDOTcom
> rgcombs AT gmailDOTcom
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