RE: You VS One

Subject: RE: You VS One
From: "Lauren" <lauren -at- writeco -dot- net>
To: "'Combs, Richard'" <richard -dot- combs -at- Polycom -dot- com>, "'Keith Hansen'" <KRH -at- weiland-wfg -dot- com>, <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Wed, 4 Jun 2008 15:04:23 -0700

> From: Combs, Richard

> Lauren wrote:
> > I think that they are both yucky.
> >
> > The first person imperative is,
> > "Register by October 15 to vote in the November election."
> That's second person imperative. The implied subject is "you" -- the
> person to whom the sentence is addressed.

Okay. It's second. Don't ask me to do math, I'll screw that up, too. I'm
not a grammarian, so get jacked on some of the grammar lingo.

> There is no first person imperative (well, maybe the voice in my
> head...).

That's the one that keeps me company. ;-)

> > "Voters who want to vote in the November election, must register by
> > October
> > 15."
> That's third person -- which is fine, but it makes the subject someone
> other than the person to whom the sentence is addressed. Thus it
> doesn't, in Leonard's words, "draw the reader into the text or evoke a
> response from the reader."
> It also has a slight logic problem: they're not voters before they
> register. And that comma has got to go.

I just noticed that the concept "voters" does not exist before the "person
who wants vote" has registered. (The comma was an error in copy-and-paste
that I just addressed.)

So, "voters" should be "people" in that sentence.

If the sentence should be, what was that?, second-person imperative? then,

"To vote in the November election, register by October 15."

But I don't like that hokey structure and I prefer the action followed by
the subject, like in my first example.




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