RE: Wrong? Poor style? OK?

Subject: RE: Wrong? Poor style? OK?
From: "Combs, Richard" <richard -dot- combs -at- Polycom -dot- com>
To: "Nancy Allison" <maker -at- verizon -dot- net>
Date: Tue, 24 Mar 2009 08:47:30 -0600

Nancy Allison wrote:

> Milan, it has to do with menu picks.
> Everyone, it quickly became apparent that the way out of the problem
> to rewrite it as "There are two ways to save test results." However,
> the
> initial grammatical question interests me in its own right.
> My editor's note was "needs a noun somewhere" I think the issue is the
> use of
> "how test results are saved"
> as the direct object of
> "controls"

I suspect, as Dave suggested, that the real issue is "There are..."

Presumably, if it's a matter of menu choices, the doc continues by
naming or describing them. I suggest some variation of what Dave
proposed. "You can save test results in two ways:" followed by two
bullet items.

Or, for a procedure step, an imperative version: "Save the test results
by doing one of the following:" again followed by two bullet items.


Richard G. Combs
Senior Technical Writer
Polycom, Inc.
richardDOTcombs AT polycomDOTcom
rgcombs AT gmailDOTcom


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