Re: Grammar (again!)

Subject: Re: Grammar (again!)
From: Deborah Hemstreet <dvora -at- tech-challenged -dot- com>
To: Lauren <lauren -at- writeco -dot- net>
Date: Wed, 20 May 2009 16:51:04 -0400

Hi Lauren,

Thanks! You re correct, they wanted the all emphasized. As for the
ellipses... no the sentence does not end there. I'm just sparing you all
the agony of what IS there <grin>

Thanks again!

Deborah

Lauren wrote:
> I agree with your final choice, but I do not like the use of "all," unless
> that was emphasized for some marketing purpose, but I do like that it breaks
> up the sentence in two short phrases. Brochure sentences should be rather
> brief, like your two phrases, since people are not reading for content.
> They want the gist of what it being sold. Does the sentence really end in
> ellipses? I don't like that.
>
> Lauren
>
>
>
>> From: Deborah Hemstreet
>>
>
>
>> Thanks to you all for your comments and suggestions on this
>> one. While
>> not optimal, I believe the following text is now better:
>>
>> We have issued licenses for six technologies, all in various
>> stages of
>> development....
>>
>> Thanks to all (including those of you who replied off-list).
>>
>> Deborah
>> http://www.tech-challenged.com
>>
>>
>
>
>
>
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References:
GUI Elements defined: From: Bruce Megan (ST-CO/ENG2.2)
Re: GUI Elements defined: From: Gregory P Sweet
Re: GUI Elements defined: From: Chris Morton
Grammar (again!): From: Deborah Hemstreet
Re: Grammar (again!): From: Mike Starr
Re: Grammar (again!): From: Deborah Hemstreet
RE: Grammar (again!): From: Lauren

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