Re: WRONG!..... -ish?

Subject: Re: WRONG!..... -ish?
From: kcbillb2 <kcbillb2 -at- kc -dot- rr -dot- com>
To: "McLauchlan, Kevin" <Kevin -dot- McLauchlan -at- safenet-inc -dot- com>
Date: Fri, 03 Feb 2012 03:32:14 -0600

Speaking as a techwriter... NEVER use the word "recommend" or the phrase "we recommend".

Seriously...:)

Instead, use "Do not remove", and then explain what dire consequences will occur if they do that...

Just a thought, but since you're obviously writing about some form of equipment/machinery...NEVER give users an out. Just tell them what to do. It's not about politeness, it's about keeping them from doing something stupid.

And if it's REALLY important, use a big Caution or Warning. Important means that they will get hurt if they remove the covers.


Seriously.


Bill


On 2/2/2012 7:52 PM, McLauchlan, Kevin wrote:

"We recommend that you not remove the covers that were installed at the factory."

"We recommend that you do not remove the covers that were installed at the factory."

Is the first sentence flatly wrong, or is this a matter of style or formality?

I'm at home, and my trusty Fowler's and my Strunk& White are at the office.


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