Re: wording q - is "both" superfluous?

Subject: Re: wording q - is "both" superfluous?
From: reshma pendse <reshma_pendse -at- yahoo -dot- co -dot- in>
To: Monique Semp <monique -dot- semp -at- earthlink -dot- net>, TechWR-L <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 24 Jul 2012 12:33:19 +0800 (SGT)

Hi Monique,

You mention:
>>>So in the doc I want to say that âYou can <access the function screen> from two starting points in the menu:â, then give the bullet list of the two menu paths, and then I want to explain that they bring you to the same screen.Â<<<


When you are starting with saying that users can access the screen from two points, why would you want to repeat the same info at the end? You might begin your paragraph with:Â

You can access the <function> screen from either of the following menu commands: <a> and <b>.


regards,
Reshma


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From: Monique Semp <monique -dot- semp -at- earthlink -dot- net>
To: TechWR-L <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Sent: Monday, 23 July 2012 10:10 PM
Subject: wording q - is "both" superfluous?

Hello, writers,

Iâm describing a situation where there are two different menu items that result in the same screen being displayed.

(No need to comment on why this isnât a good idea â this is a temporary state in the software thatâs intended to make some big picture changes easier for current customers to deal with, and on the resulting screen this is clearly explained.)

So in the doc I want to say that âYou can <access the function screen> from two starting points in the menu:â, then give the bullet list of the two menu paths, and then I want to explain that they bring you to the same screen.

So for that final sentence, which of the following is best, and, more importantly, why?

* Both menu selections bring you to the <function> screen.
* Either menu selection brings you to the <function> screen.

Or, maybe I avoid it altogether and just say, âWhen you choose the <function> from the Dashboard menu, the <function> screen appears.â

Thoughts?
-Monique


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