RE: wording q - is "both" superfluous?

Subject: RE: wording q - is "both" superfluous?
From: "McLauchlan, Kevin" <Kevin -dot- McLauchlan -at- safenet-inc -dot- com>
To: "Combs, Richard" <richard -dot- combs -at- Polycom -dot- com>, Monique Semp <monique -dot- semp -at- earthlink -dot- net>, TechWR-L <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Mon, 23 Jul 2012 14:21:21 -0400

Some possibilities (I haven't seen tonight's spam summary, so at least half
the list mail is still being held - sorry if these were already posted):

"From the Dashboard, choose option A or choose option F, to access <function>.
(For reasons of legacy support, either option opens <function>.)"

or

"From the Dashboard, choose option A to access <function>.
[Legacy users can also choose option F to access <function>.]"

Obviously, you could choose a phrase less generic than "legacy support"
or "Legacy users".

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> To: Monique Semp; TechWR-L
> Subject: RE: wording q - is "both" superfluous?
>
> Monique Semp wrote:
>
> > So in the doc I want to say that âYou can <access the function
> screen>
> > from two starting points in the menu:â, then give the bullet list of
> > the two menu paths, and then I want to explain that they bring you
> to
> > the same screen.
> >
> > So for that final sentence, which of the following is best, and, more
> > importantly, why?
> >
> > * Both menu selections bring you to the <function> screen.
> > * Either menu selection brings you to the <function> screen.
>
> You start by telling them to access the <function> screen in one of
> two ways and end by telling them those are the two ways to access
> the <function> screen. Too many words. Too much repetition and
> detail. That's how you end up with a thousand-page manual that
> nobody ever reads.
>
> > Or, maybe I avoid it altogether and just say, âWhen you choose the
> > <function> from the Dashboard menu, the <function> screen
> appears.â
>
> Much better.
>
> Richard G. Combs
> Senior Technical Writer
> Polycom, Inc.
> richardDOTcombs AT polycomDOTcom
> 303-223-5111
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References:
wording q - is "both" superfluous?: From: Monique Semp
RE: wording q - is "both" superfluous?: From: Combs, Richard

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