RE: Taking active vs. passive voice too far

Subject: RE: Taking active vs. passive voice too far
From: "Green, Duane" <Duane -dot- Green -at- e-hps -dot- com>
To: Lynne Wright <Lynne -dot- Wright -at- tiburoninc -dot- com>, "M -dot- Vina-Baltsas -at- mindray -dot- com" <M -dot- Vina-Baltsas -at- mindray -dot- com>, "techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 9 Jul 2013 15:35:09 +0000

I agree. We strive to follow this style: To "X", do "Y". Tell them what they're going to do, then tell them how they're going to do it.



Duane Green
Technical Publications Manager
Heartland Payment Systems
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Subject: RE: Taking active vs. passive voice too far

I'd use:

List Trends

To access List Trends, click the History button in the Main Screen.


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Sent: Tuesday, July 09, 2013 10:45 AM
To: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
Subject: Taking active vs. passive voice too far

I'm working with a manual that was primarily written in the passive voice.
I'm struggling with how far I should go with my edits. No, there is no style guide, and as a result, there are many inconsistencies throughout the manual. Please see the examples below and tell me if you think I'm going too far with active vs. passive voice.

Topic heading:
List Trends
List Trends can be accessed by selecting the History button from the Main Screen.

or

Topic heading:
List Trends
Access List Trends by selecting the History button from the Main Screen.

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Michelle Viña-Baltsas



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References:
Taking active vs. passive voice too far: From: M . Vina-Baltsas
RE: Taking active vs. passive voice too far: From: Lynne Wright

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