Re: Need Help with Wording!

Subject: Re: Need Help with Wording!
From: Joanna Sheldon <cjs10 -at- CORNELL -dot- EDU>
Date: Mon, 3 Apr 1995 18:19:52 -0400

To simplify the second sentence below:

>2. If you have more than one file vault defined, the menu
> cascades to display the file vault names. Select the

^^^^^^^^^^
> vault in which the file for which you want to change
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> the number of versions resides.
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

...you could say:

"Select the vault that contains the file for which you want to change the
number of versions."

If you've already made it VERY clear to the user that s/he is looking for
the file in order to change the number of its versions, you might be able to
say, simply: "Select the vault that contains the appropriate file."

--JS


Joanna Sheldon
Technical Writer, Translator
(French, German, Italian)
cjs10 -at- cornell -dot- edu

"One must never let a euphemism or a false consolation pass uncontested."
Christopher Hitchens


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