Re: Need Help with Wording!

Subject: Re: Need Help with Wording!
From: Heilan Yvette Grimes <HEP2 -at- AOL -dot- COM>
Date: Thu, 6 Apr 1995 00:44:14 -0400

>From Sue Gallagher:

> If you have more than one file vault defined, the menu
> cascades to display the file vault names. Select the
> ^^^^^^^^^^
> vault in which the file for which you want to change
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> the number of versions resides.
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
>[snip]

> "Select the vault that contains the file for which you
> want to change the number of versions."

> If you've already made it VERY clear to the user that
> s/he is looking for the file in order to change the
> number of its versions, you might be able to say, simply:
> "Select the vault that contains the appropriate file."

The above still seems awkward. What about:

Select the vault which lists the file whose number of versions you wish to
change.

or

Select the vault which lists the file whose version numbers you wish to
change.

--Yvette


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