Challenge to active-verb advocates

Subject: Challenge to active-verb advocates
From: David Fisher <DAF -dot- DSKPO27B -at- DSKBGW1 -dot- ITG -dot- TI -dot- COM>
Date: Fri, 26 Jan 1996 07:20:02 CST

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Enough of the easy rewrites. Can you recast the following sentence in
active voice and improve it?

(clock starts ticking)

"The leaves on the sidewalk were kicked and scattered by passing
feet."

This sentence constitutes the sole member of my "Passive Verb Defense Arsenal."
Can you suggest any other candidates?
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"The passing feet of careless travelers kicked and scattered the ruddy pile of
leaves in swirl of snowy red."

(stop the clock)


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