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Subject:Re: Question of clarity From:Diane Giangrossi <dgiangrossi -at- BAKERHILL -dot- COM> Date:Mon, 21 Jun 1999 10:56:14 -0500
I'd do it like this -- one step with two sentences:
From the Plant Menu, select (13) for Work with Whatever. Then press Enter.
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> Subject: Question of clarity
> I am trying to figure out what's the best
> way to present a complex step (not that
> it's difficult, but I want the instruction to
> read clearly). Some might argue that this
> should be broken into two steps, but
> I need to try and keep it in one step.
> Here's the sentence:
> From the Plant Menu, select (13) for Work
> with Whatever, and press Enter.
> A co-worker suggested that I remove the
> second comma. I explained that I put it
> there to cue the user...to clearly separate
> the sub-actions that make up the step.
> Does anyone have some ideas on the
> readability one way or the other? TIA
> Melissa Morgan
> mmorgan -at- intrepid -dot- cdg-hargray -dot- com
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