RE: I like mine better, but I don't know why.

["Nora Merhar" <nmerhar -at- charlesindustries -dot- com>]

John,

Technically, she's right. The way the sentences would read if they were
complete would be

--It (the new process) improves adherence...
--It automates workflow...

And so forth. You need a plural subject to structure it the way you want to
(these new process improve adherence...).

But Keith's suggestion was a good one.

Nora

> I'm going back and forth with an analyst on something. I have the
> following paragraph:
>
> -------
> This new process delivers the following benefits to the business:
> - Improve adherence to corporate discount policies, increase sales
>   efficiencies, improve margins, automate and expedite a
>   standardized Discount Approval process.
> - Automate workflow of schedule of authorization table lookup to:
>   - Confirm Level of authorization
>   - etc.....
> -------
>
> She keeps adding an S at the end of many of the words, such as
> Improves, increases, improves, expedites, Automates, Confirms, etc..


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