RE: Repeat the verb?

["technical writing plus" <doc-x -at- earthlink -dot- net>]

Here is my opinion. Do away with the comma in the middle (, and should..).
As to the repeated 'should': I do not think that it is 'bad English'. In
fact, sometimes it ought to be repeated. 

Here I'd say that your 'should' ought to be repeated. This repetition makes
the sentence clearer. 

Jim Jones

-----Original Message-----
..Please note: a bulleted list is not permissible in this document. It's not
the style. And, because the document is describing complex regulatory
requirements and relationships, sentences tend to be dense and full. I
rewrite the worst, and I consider this sentence to be borderline, but I'm
going to leave it as is. There's too much else to do on the doc in the time
I have.

Having provided that context, I ask you this: if you had to incorporate the
following sentence as is (and not break it into two sentences, or a bulleted
list, or anything else that a reasonably talented tech writer would
immediately do), which version would you use? And, please tell me if you
would add or remove any punctuation:

---The bank should have clear standards for the collection and modification
of all elements, and should combine these elements in a manner that most
effectively enables it to quantify its exposure to operational risk. 

---The bank should have clear standards for the collection and modification
of all elements, and combine these elements in a manner that most
effectively enables it to quantify its exposure to operational risk. 

I always want to repeat the modal auxiliary; it seems too hard to wade
through the first long noun phrase and instantly remember that auxiliary
when you hit the second base verb form. However, I have been informed that
this type of repetition is "bad English."..

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