RE: Need some opinions on phrasing

["Leonard C. Porrello" <Leonard -dot- Porrello -at- SoleraTec -dot- com>]

I am thoroughly confused. 

It isn't clear to me that your #1 and #2 say the same thing. #2
indicates that TL6 or higher is required if one is to use "IBM AIX
Native MPIO
TL6+". #1 indicates that exactly TL6 is required if one is to use "IBM
AIX Native MPIO TL6+"; that one can use a TL higher or lower than 6, as
you indicate in your comment, is in no way indicated or implied.

Nevertheless, to mean the same thing as #2, #1 would need to say, "AIX
servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is a minimum of Version 5.3 with
Technology Level 6 (TL6)or higher, select IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+;
otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.

As to your original question, I don't mind the reuse of "or higher" in
#2. As I understand it, "or higher" is orthodox usage; "a minimum
version" is not.

Finally, regardless of what you mean, I find both versions difficult to
understand. Consequently, I totally agree with Keith. If you can't map
the ideas, however, how about this: 

"For AIX servers using Native MPIO, AIX version 5.3 or higher, and
Technology Level 6 (TL6) or higher, select IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+.
Otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy."

Or, if a specific TL is not a requirement and all AIX versions feature a
TL...

"For AIX servers using Native MPIO and AIX version 5.3 or higher, select
IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+. Otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy."

Leonard

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Subject: Need some opinions on phrasing

Hi All, 

I have two different statements below that mean the same thing. I prefer
statement #1 because I do not like the use of "or higher" twice in the
phrase, as shown in #2. Someone else here prefers the use of the words
"or higher" over "a minimum of." 

I guess it's minor, but is there a preferred way to phrase this? If not,
can I hear some opinions on which sentence sounds better?

1.	For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is a minimum of
Version 5.3 with Technology Level 6 (TL6), select IBM AIX Native MPIO
TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.

2.	For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is Version 5.3 or
higher with Technology Level 6 (TL6) or higher, select IBM AIX Native
MPIO TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.

BTW, I hope I'm clear, if a user has AIX V5.4 with TL2, he would select
IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+. Striving for clarity, I removed what was there
previously which was: "...where AIX is Version 5.3 with Technology Level
6 (TL6) or higher, select select IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+; otherwise,
select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy." I thought the user might think that
version 5.3 was a requirement, but that the technology level had to be a
minimum of 6, which is incorrect.

Thank you!

Deb Slutzky
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