Re: Need some opinions on phrasing

Subject: Re: Need some opinions on phrasing
From: quills -at- airmail -dot- net
To: "Deborah Slutzky" <Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com>, <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Tue, 27 Jan 2009 13:02:15 -0600

How about:

For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is Version 5.3 with
Technology Level 6 (TL6), or later, select IBM ZIX Native MPIO TL6+;
otherwise, select IBM Native MPIO Legacy.


At 12:48 PM -0500 1/27/09, Deborah Slutzky wrote:
>Hi All,
>
>
>
>I have two different statements below that mean the same thing. I prefer
>statement #1 because I do not like the use of "or higher" twice in the
>phrase, as shown in #2. Someone else here prefers the use of the words
>"or higher" over "a minimum of."
>
>I guess it's minor, but is there a preferred way to phrase this? If not,
>can I hear some opinions on which sentence sounds better?
>
>
>
>1. For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is a minimum of
>Version 5.3 with Technology Level 6 (TL6), select IBM AIX Native MPIO
>TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.
>
>
>
>2. For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is Version 5.3 or
>higher with Technology Level 6 (TL6) or higher, select IBM AIX Native
>MPIO TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.
>
>
>
>BTW, I hope I'm clear, if a user has AIX V5.4 with TL2, he would select
>IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+. Striving for clarity, I removed what was there
>previously which was: "...where AIX is Version 5.3 with Technology Level
>6 (TL6) or higher, select select IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+; otherwise,
>select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy." I thought the user might think that
>version 5.3 was a requirement, but that the technology level had to be a
>minimum of 6, which is incorrect.
>
>Thank you!
>
>Deb Slutzky
>DataCore Software
>Sr. Technical Writer
>954/377-6028
>Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com <mailto:Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com>
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