Need some opinions on phrasing

["Deborah Slutzky" <Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com>]

Hi All, 

 

I have two different statements below that mean the same thing. I prefer
statement #1 because I do not like the use of "or higher" twice in the
phrase, as shown in #2. Someone else here prefers the use of the words
"or higher" over "a minimum of." 

I guess it's minor, but is there a preferred way to phrase this? If not,
can I hear some opinions on which sentence sounds better? 

 

1.	For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is a minimum of
Version 5.3 with Technology Level 6 (TL6), select IBM AIX Native MPIO
TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.

 

2.	For AIX servers using Native MPIO, where AIX is Version 5.3 or
higher with Technology Level 6 (TL6) or higher, select IBM AIX Native
MPIO TL6+; otherwise, select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy.

 

BTW, I hope I'm clear, if a user has AIX V5.4 with TL2, he would select
IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+. Striving for clarity, I removed what was there
previously which was: "...where AIX is Version 5.3 with Technology Level
6 (TL6) or higher, select select IBM AIX Native MPIO TL6+; otherwise,
select IBM AIX Native MPIO Legacy." I thought the user might think that
version 5.3 was a requirement, but that the technology level had to be a
minimum of 6, which is incorrect.

Thank you!

Deb Slutzky
DataCore Software
Sr. Technical Writer
954/377-6028
Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com <mailto:Deborah -dot- Slutzky -at- datacore -dot- com>  

 

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