RE: "Is energized"

Subject: RE: "Is energized"
From: <kathleen -at- writefortheuser -dot- com>
To: "Donald H White" <dwhite -at- jrtcllc -dot- com>
Date: Mon, 30 Nov 2009 07:21:26 -0700

I agree with your suggestion and Donald's (e.g., below).

It not only makes it active, it's more informative than the passive
version, and a simpler (thus easier and quicker to read and understand).

Kathleen

> -------- Original Message --------
> Subject: RE: "Is energized"
> From: "Donald H White" <dwhite -at- jrtcllc -dot- com>
> Date: Mon, November 30, 2009 8:02 am
> To: <BBEGIN -at- aol -dot- com>, <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
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>
> "<component V> activates (energizes) relay XYZ"
>

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> |From: BBEGIN -at- aol -dot- com [mailto:BBEGIN -at- aol -dot- com]
> |Sent: Monday, November 30, 2009 8:57 AM
> |To: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> |Cc: BBEGIN -at- aol -dot- com
> |Subject: "Is energized"
> |
> |
> |Any suggestions for making "is energized" into the active voice?
> |
> |I'm working on a project that must all be in the active voice. Many
> |circuitry descriptions are "the XYZ relay is energized" and
> |"the relay is picked
> |up." Any suggestions for changing these to active? Sometimes
> |"energy flows
> |to the XYZ relay" sounds awkward, and might not be accurate.
> |I also try to
> |reverse this: "the ABC energizes the XYZ relay."
> |
> |TIA,
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