Wording problem! Arrrggh!

Subject: Wording problem! Arrrggh!
From: Nancy Allison <maker -at- verizon -dot- net>
To: techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
Date: Thu, 09 Jun 2011 10:16:06 -0500 (CDT)

Once again, with content!

Such a dumb bothersome thing, but it's driving me nuts. I'm working on
a marketing release note that lists changes and improvements in the
newest software release. There's a bulleted list that includes items

-- Added Windows 7 support
--Improved speed of plot display

and quite a few entries that begin with

--Fixed a problem where . . .

as in

--Fixed a problem where Print Preview caused an error when no printer
was installed.

A slight, although stodgy, improvement would be "Fixed a problem in
which . . ." but I'm not sure the thing occurs IN a problem any more
than it occurs WHERE the problem vaguely occurs. Problems are not
locational -- at least, the problems we're describing do not occur in a
specific location in real or virtual space.

Each item in the list begins with an active verb, which you want in a
document that's explaining all the good things you've done to improve
the product. So Fixed is a desireable word in that way, but plenty of
other verbs are equally attractive. I'd like to keep the pattern of
starting each item with a strong active verb.

I just can't think of how to do it!

Do you perceive the original wording as enough of a problem for me to
fuss over, or should I just move on to the other 9999 things I need to
get done today?

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