Correct Grammar

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>Subject:      Correct Grammar
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>Here's one for all of you English "Experts".  With the following poem:

>"On the beach of indecision
>lay the bleached bones of thousands
>Who with victory in sight
>Sat down to think about it"

>On the third line should the first word be Who or should it be When?

Poetic license being what it is, the final arbiter of this
question is the poet.  However, I would favor "who" over "when."
"Who" would allude to the human element (the bone-owners, as it
were) and also act as the agent of "sat" in the last line.
"When" would offer only indirect support for the last line and
wouldn't modify lines 1 and 2 at all.

That's my $.02 (before taxes).
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Dave Meek