Re: Technical adj. stack question

Subject: Re: Technical adj. stack question
From: "Kristine J. Olberg" <kjolberg -at- IX -dot- NETCOM -dot- COM>
Date: Sun, 30 Mar 1997 19:19:42 -0600

> From: Sella Rush <SellaR -at- APPTECHSYS -dot- COM>
> Objects are stored in a multi-tiered, dynamically hashed, persistent
> storage susbsystem.
> Objects are stored in a persistent subsystem that is structured in
> multiple tiers and uses dynamic hashing to provide fast scalable access
> to data.

I understood the first sentence perfectly. My opinion is that, in this
specific case, if the reader is capable of understanding the second
version, they will understand the first. Therefore, the rewrite has added
no value.

I have coached technical editors on this point many times: Don't rewrite a
sentence for the sake of rewriting. However, if you can add value by
rewriting, do it. Otherwise you're wasting time.

kris -at- olberg -dot- com
kolberg -at- actamed -dot- com

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