RE: What is wrong with this sentence?

Subject: RE: What is wrong with this sentence?
From: "Jones, Donna" <DJones -at- zebra -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com>
Date: Thu, 14 Apr 2005 08:39:31 -0500


Shelly,

At the very least, there should be a comma between "interface" and "using" so you don't leave the reader wondering at first glance whether "using" is part of a verb phrase. The phrase "using which" is awkward, but if the whole clause is set off by a comma, I don't think it's grammatically incorrect (I could be wrong--just going by what I remember).

However, I think the sentence would be better rewritten as:

"ABC provides the XYZ interface, which you can use to
create folders for storing your personal card information."

That's my not-so-humble opinion as a former editor. :-)

Donna


Donna L. Jones
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Technical Writer II
Zebra Technologies Corp.
Vernon Hills, IL
djones -at- zebra -dot- com


> "ABC provides the XYZ interface using which you can create folders for
> storing your personal card information."
>
> Specifically, what's wrong with the use of "using which". I think its
> incorrect, but I am not sure why that is so.

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